WRITING 3 ( 4th Assigment)

WRITING 3 (MEETING 4)

Name   : TIARA LIZA

SRN      : 12340031

In this next task I will write some story about my achievement in my life. This writing use narrative text. The purpose of this writing is to entertain the reader, tell about my experience, and give motivation to the readers that everyone can get their own achievement.

My Achievement.

Hay guys! I would ask you, what is the achievement that you have got in your life? Yes I thought every people have some achievement in their life. In this beautiful occasion I would tell you about my achievement. It happened a few months ago. And this made me very happy and proud.

One day I got a short message service from the leader of ASES  brother Heri Purnomo. For your information ASES is organization for Muhammadiyah university student in English education study program . In the short message service, brother Heri told that all members of ASES  should gathered after class end to attend the meeting. After class end , I and my friends gathered in room to attend the meeting. It turns out that in this meeting we discussed about following some contest at one of the universities in Lampung and we will represent Muhammadiyah university . There are several branches of the contest that followed, there are debate , scrabble , speech , and wall magazine . After that we decided who are the student will followed the contest. And I never thought I had chosen to follow wall magazine contest. In this contest needed 1 gruop which consists of 3 people, Me, Indah Maharani my classmate , and Sister Annisa from 7th semester . After decided who will follow the contest , the meeting finally ended and will process with the preparation in the next day.

Because the time was getting close, the next day  I was always practicing and preparing everything to be better prepared. Indah, sisters Annisa and I began making wall magazine concept to which my group and I will brought at the contest. When I prepared everything, bro syarief also helped us to do everything that we needed.

And finally the contest day came. At 7am I and my friends were gathered in our beloved campus to went to where the race begins together. I and my friends went there by UM’s mini bus. Around one and a half hours we arrived to Bunda Delima Nursing Academy, Bandar Lampung. When arrived there I got a little guidance. After that I and my group entered the contest room. For wall magazine competition the participants were given about 2 hours to work to complete the wall magazine. And the contest began, my group and I do it carefully for maximum results as we want. Because my group and I have a good cooperation and compact we could finish well and on time. After the time was over, the judge call each group to present the wall magazine. With the theme of “safe our environment” we could present it well. and the announcement of the winner will be announced in the next day.

The next day I went there again to find out if my friends and I got a winner or not. And this was the best surprise I ever got besides a birthday surprise hehehe .. My friends and I did not think that the wall magazine team get 3rd winner. It was the first achievement I got while studying at university of Muhammadiyah. And the more pleasure this was the first trophy that my friends and I gave to our study program. But unfortunately my friends and I are still a little bit disappointed because  have not got a winner in other branches of the contest. But my friends and I are still grateful that could get in the championship contest in wall  magazine.

And finally I brought home our trophy. I was very happy and proud because I was able to achieve this achievement. I am very thankful to God and grateful to my friends who have helped our group in that contest.

Identifying text :

-          Tittle                     :  My Achievment

-          Theme                  :  Achievement

-          Plot                       :  Forward

-          Setting                  :  1. In meeting room

                                  2. In our beloved Campus Muhammadiyah University

                                  3. On the way

                                  4. Bunda Delima Nursing Academy

-          Character              : 1. I (Tiara Liza)

                                 2. Indah Maharani

                                 3. Sister Annisa

                                 4. Brother Heri Purnomo

                                 5. Brother Syarief

                                6. My friends

Language features of the text :

1.      Using Past tense                                   : All of the verb on that text use V2 form

2.      Using action verbs                                : told, gathered, made, etc.

3.      Using specific participants                     : I, my friends, my group

4.      Using time conjunction                          : next day, day came, etc.

Identifying paragraph :

1.       INTRODUCING PARAGRAPH

Hay guys! I would ask you, what is the achievement that you

 have got in your life? Yes i thought every people have some achievement in their life. In this beautiful occasion i would tell you about my achievement. It happened a few months ago. And this made me very happy and proud.

2.       TOPIC SENTENCE

And I never thought I had chosen to follow wall magazine contest.

3.       CONTROLLING IDEA

In this contest needed 1 group which consists of 3 people , there are me, indah maharani my classmate , and sister annisa from 7th semester .

4.       SUPPORTING IDEA

-          For your information ASES is organization for Muhammadiyah university student in English education study program . In the short message service, bro heri told that all members of ASES  should gathered after class end to attend the meeting. After class end , i and my friends gathered in room to attend the meeting. It turns out that in this meeting we discussed about following some contest at one of the universities in Lampung and we will represent Muhammadiyah university . There are several branches of the contest that followed, there are debate , scrabble , speech , and wall magazine . After that we decided who are the student will followed the contest.

-          For your information ASES is organization for Muhammadiyah university student in English education study program . In the short message service, bro heri told that all members of ASES  should gathered after class end to attend the meeting. After class end , i and my friends gathered in room to attend the meeting. It turns out that in this meeting we discussed about following some contest at one of the universities in Lampung and we will represent Muhammadiyah university . There are several branches of the contest that followed, there are debate , scrabble , speech , and wall magazine . After that we decided who are the student will followed the contest.

-          And finally the contest day came. at 7am I and my friends were gathered in our beloved campus to went to where the race begins together. I and my friends went there by UM’s mini bus. Around one and a half hours we arrived to Bunda Delima Nurisng Academy Bandar Lampung. When arrived there I got a little guidance. After that I and my group entered the contest room. For wall magazine competition the participants were given about 2 hours to work to complete the wall magazine. And the contest began, my group and I do it carefully for maximum results as we want. Because we have a good cooperation and compact we could finish well and on time. After the time was over, the judge call each group to present the wall magazine. With the theme of “Safe Our Environment” we could present it well. and the announcement of the winner will be announced in the next day.

-          The next day we went there again to find out if we get a winner or not. And this was the best surprise I ever got besides a birthday surprise hehehe .. I and my friends did not think that the wall magazine team get 3rd winner. It was the first achievement I got while studying at university of Muhammadiyah. And the more pleasure this was the first trophy that we gave to our study program. But unfortunately we are still a little bit disappointed because we have not got a winner in other branches of the contest. But we are still grateful that could get in the championship contest in wall  magazine.

5.       CONCLUDING SENTENCE

And finally we brought home our trophy. I was very happy and proud because I was able to achieve this achievement. I am very thankful to God and grateful to my friends who have helped our group in that contest.

Okay guys, that's all story about my achievement. Thanks for your nice attention. And i hope you can give me suggestion about my writing in this story ^ ^

And this is My Wall Magazine ^_^

3rd Metting of Writing 3 Assignment

Name  : Tiara Liza

NPM   : 12340031

WRITING 3

1.     Description how to write paragraph with adequate and inadequate cohesion :

The way to write paragraph with adequate and inadequate cohesion there are three steps : 1. Topic Sentence, 2. Body or supporting sentence, and 3. concluding sentence. Explain and support the topic sentence. Develop a paragraph in main idea. Express this idea in topic sentence. Support the main idea of the paragraph with details. It can conclude that paragraph is a the combination more than 2 sentence in writing  which every sentence related each other and develop on one main idea. And you should concern the component below : 1. Relevance  2. Order 3. Linking/Transition words  4.Repetition of key words

2.     COHESION :

All language tools, which are used to provide links and help in connecting one part of the sentence, are important in achieving cohesion in the text. It is difficult to define cohesion but one can visualize it as small sentences adding up to make for a meaningful text as is the case with many different pieces fitting together to make for a jigsaw puzzle. For a writer, it is better to start with text that the reader is already familiar with to make a piece cohesive. This can also be done with the last few words in a sentence setting up the next few words at the start of the next sentence.

In short, the links that stick different sentences and make the text meaningful can be thought of as cohesion in the text. Establishing connections between sentences, sections, and even paragraphs using synonyms, verb tenses, time references etc. is what brings cohesion in a text. Cohesion can be thought of as glue sticking different parts of furniture so that it takes the shape the writer wants it to give.

3.     Differences between Coherence and Cohesion :

Cohesion and coherence are linguistic qualities that are desirable in a text and as such considered important for all students trying to master a language. It is not just the awareness of these qualities but also their use in a text that makes for an important skill for students learning a language. There are many who think that cohesion and coherence are synonyms and can be used interchangeably.

• If different sentences in a text are linked properly, it is said to be cohesive.

• If a text appears to make sense to a reader, it is said to be coherent.

• A cohesive text can appear as incoherent to the reader making it clear that the two properties of a text are not the same.

• Coherence is a property decided by the reader whereas cohesion is a property of the text achieved by the writer making use of different tools like synonyms, verb tenses, time references etc.

• Cohesion can be measured and verified through rules of grammar and semantics though measuring coherence is rather difficult.

4.     Text or sentences that shows adequate or inadequate cohesion:

Hello! I am Tiara..

Hello guys, hello my blogy^^ this time, I will tell you about myself  :D  I consufe where to start it hehe.. hmm okay, I think the first I will start from introduce my name hehe  :D

My name is Tiara Liza, my nick name is Tiara, I am 19^th years old, I was born in Metro city on October, 14^th 1994 and then my father’s name is Drs. Zainuddin and my mother’s name is Lise Ariani. My father’s job is civil servant. Actually I have many nicknames, my senior high school friends call me “Puket”, an'd my university friends call me “Titah” , and sometime they call me “Angelina Jolie”, because they said my lips like Angelina Jolie’s lips hahaha :D it is sounds very silly hahahaa :D and in my house my family also call me “Titah”. Actually in my origin “Titah” mean old sister. So, all of my young brother and my young sister call me titah. Now, I  am university student on Muhammadiyah University especially on english department and I am in 4^th semester. My origin is from Lampungesse and that is my father origin, my mother origin is Javanesse and my religion is Islam. I live at Metro city, especially on Way Pengubuan street No.16, 21 East Metro. I live with parents and my young brother. Physically, I have light brown skin, and my eyes colour are black. My hair is long and straight. My blood type is O. I have height about 158 cm, and my weight around 45 kg. Other people siad that I am tall enough. People say that I am thin. My body is not ideal because my weight just 45 kg, I sholud increase my weight. Actually I eat al lot, but do not why it is hard to increase my weight.  I have many hobbys such as chatting, reading, wathing movie, slepping, shopping and many more. I also like listening to the music. I prefer English music, because it can increase my ability to speak english. Because I am English student. All of those about me. As a student in Teacher Training and Education Faculty especially in English department, I have studied hard to increase my ability in english, always pray to Allah SWT, doing what I can and what I love, and always improve myself to be a better person in the future. And I will make my  parents proud of me. I think that’s all the best thing of me.

Note : the underline sentences is Cohesion.

5.     Explanation categorized into cohesion:

No.	Sentence	Explanation
1.	I am 19 years old, I was born in Metro city on October, 14th 1994	That sentence show that relevance because exlpain my age.
2.	Actually I have many nicknames, my senior high school friends call me “Puket”, an'd my university friends call me “Titah” , and sometime they call me “Angelina Jolie”, because they said my lips like Angelina Jolie’s lips hahaha :D it is sounds very silly hahahaa :D and in my house my family also call me “Titah”. Actually in my origin “Titah” mean old sister. So, all of my young brother and my young sister call me titah.	That sentence show cohesion. Because that sentence explain about my nicknames. And there are some transition words such as: because, so, and.
3.	Now, I  am university student on Muhammadiyah University especially on english department and I am in 4th semester.	That sentence is relevance. Because that sentence show that I am university student on English department and fourth semester.
4.	I live at Metro city, especially on Way Pengubuan street No.16, 21 East Metro. I live with parents and my young brother.	That sentence explain where I live and I live with my parents, so that sentence is relevance.
5.	Physically, I have light brown skin, and my eyes colour are black. My hair is long and straight.	That sentences shows the cohesion because it has proven the relevance that explain about me physically.
6.	I have height about 158 cm, and my weight around 45 kg. Other people siad that I am tall enough. People say that I am thin. My body is not ideal because my weight just 45 kg, I sholud increase my weight. Actually I eat al lot, but do not why it is hard to increase my weight.	That sentences explain about my physically from my weight until my height and that is relevance and shows cohesion.
7.	I prefer English music, because it can increase my ability to speak english. Because I am English student.	That sentence shows the cohesion and relevanca sentence. And there is transition word : because.

Writing 3, Second Task. (Descriptive Text with Adequate, Inadequate, & Coherence)

The way to write paragraph with adequate and inadequate unity : 

• Unity :
  

Unity refers to the extent to which all of the ideas contained within a given paragraph "hang together" in a way that is easy for the reader to understand. When the writer changes to a new idea -- one which is not consistent with the topic sentence of the paragraph -- the writer should begin a new paragraph. Unity is important because it aids the reader in following along with the writer's ideas. The reader can expect that a given paragraph will deal only with one main topic; when a new paragraph begins, this signals that the writer is moving on to a new topic.

How to write paragraph with adequate and inadequate unity:

When you write a paragraph, you should put into three of component of paragrpahs namely : Topic Sentence, Body or supporting sentence, and concluding sentence. Explain and support the topic sentence. Develop a paragraph in main idea. Express this idea in topic sentence. Support the main idea of the paragraph with details.

it can conclude that paragraph is a the combination more than 2 sentence in writing  which every sentence related each other and develop on one main idea.

A coherent paragraph has sentences that all logically follow each other; they are not isolated thoughts. Coherence can be achieved in several ways. First, using transitions helps connect ideas from one sentence to the next. For more on transitions, see the Write Right on Transitions. Second, ordering thoughts in numerical sequence helps to direct the reader from one point to the next. Third, structuring each paragraph according to one of the following patterns helps to organize sentences: general to particular; particular to general; whole to parts; question to answer; or effect to cause. 

 

• Descriptive Paragraph :

Hello! I am Tiara :)

Hello guys, hello my blogy^^ this time, I will tell you about myself  :D  I consufe where to start it hehe.. hmm okay, I think the first I will start from introduce my name hehe  :D

My name is Tiara Liza, my nick name is Tiara, I am 19^th years old, I was born in Metro city on October, 14^th 1994 and then my father’s name is Drs. Zainuddin and my mother’s name is Lise Ariani. My father’s job is civil servant. Actually I have many nicknames, my senior high school friends call me “Puket”, an'd my university friends call me “Titah” , and sometime they call me “Angelina Jolie”, because they said my lips like Angelina Jolie’s lips hahaha :D it is sounds very silly hahahaa :D and in my house my family also call me “Titah”. Actually in my origin “Titah” mean old sister. So, all of my young brother and my young sister call me titah. Now, I  am university student on Muhammadiyah University especially on english department and I am in 4^th semester.My origin is from Lampungesse and that is my father origin, my mother origin is Javanesse and my religion is Islam. I live at Metro city, especially on Way Pengubuan street No.16, 21 East Metro. I live with parents and my young brother. Physically, I have light brown skin, and my eyes colour are black. My hair is long and straight. My blood type is O. I have height about 158 cm, and my weight around 45 kg. Other people siad that I am tall enough. People say that I am thin. My body is not ideal because my weight just 45 kg, I sholud increase my weight. Actually I eat al lot, but do not why it is hard to increase my weight.  I have many hobbys such as chatting, reading, wathing movie, slepping, shopping and many more. I also like listening to the music. I prefer English music, because it can increase my ability to speak english. Because I am English student. All of those about me. As a student in Teacher Training and Education Faculty especially in English department, I have studied hard to increase my ability in english, always pray to Allah SWT, doing what I can and what I love, and always improve myself to be a better person in the future. And I will make my  parents proud of me. I think that’s all the best thing of me.

Note :

Pink colour : Tittle

Purple colour : Introducing

Blue colour : Identification

Red colour : Description

Black colour : Concluding